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“The Best Simplicity” [Another “Finding Mister Wright” short]

A reblog of 2015’s Valentine’s Day post, including a romance short featuring Messrs. Wright and McAllister, of my “Finding Mister Wright” universe. All of my stories are about love in one form or another, even the one I’m currently mired in editing, about the five space adventurers running toward a fate of mutual danger. 

 

“The Best Simplicity”

A “Finding Mister Wright” pre-fic / © 2016 Mayumi Hirtzel

 

The bar smelled of too much eager libido, in the form of conflicting colognes and pungent perfumes that hung in the air and clung to unsuspecting skin. It thumped, too, pounding into unified time pulses that should have stayed unique, by the overpowering bass on the stereo system. When he did manage to hear himself think, Daniel Wright wondered how in hell he’d let his little brother talk him into this particular scenario.

“You’ve been going out with this guy for, what? Two months, now?” Marshall had needled, in that incessantly annoying way so common to yappy Pomeranians and younger brothers. “And you haven’t even gotten to first base, yet?” Despite any more secretive desires to the contrary, Daniel’s earnest reply that he’d been taking his time, that he liked just getting to know Rob McAllister, hadn’t diminished his brother’s insistence on a night out with the handsome high school history teacher:

“Come out with me and Brandi on Saturday,” Marshall had insisted. “It’s Valentine’s Day, the best day of the year to get busy. Trust me,” he’d added with an exaggerated wink; “with me as your wingman, your man’s pants’ll be down around his ankles in no time.”

Daniel had scowled at Marshall’s perpetually flippant attitude…but he’d come, anyway, especially when Rob had offered good-natured agreement to a night out:

“Should I dress up, or anything?”

“It’s just for a few drinks with my brother and his girlfriend du jour,” Daniel had told him over the phone. But he’d still chosen the nicest smart casual ensemble from his own wardrobe for tonight: his best non-suit trousers, button-down, and cinching vest, the one that most flattered his shoulders and waist.

Rob seemed to have prepared the same, fussing idly with the slim tie around his neck as they waited for Marshall at their high-top round. He had an air of charming boyishness when he fidgeted so, but, in his sport coat and tie, he looked like Paul Newman in “The Hustler.” Daniel had spent many a private moment back at uni staring at a black-and-white photo still of a shirtless Newman clutching a ready-to-be-ravished Piper Laurie….

“You come here a lot?” Rob suddenly asked, in more of a shout than a question.

Daniel shook his head, just in case he couldn’t be heard. “No. Marshall says the wine’s good, though.”

“The what?”

“The wine!” Daniel repeated, lifting his glass of Shiraz, ordered for his brother’s recommendation.

“Oh. Yeah! It’s great.” Rob nodded and tipped his own glass up, sipping around a smile.

Daniel drank, too, again, muttering, “Shit,” into his spicy, smoky drink. They couldn’t even talk in here, let alone get the chance for any more intimate interaction. Not that he thought Rob was ready for that. But how were they supposed to make any kind of connection if they couldn’t hear each other?

“Hey!” Marshall swished up to Daniel’s shoulder, seemingly from nowhere. He had his arm around a pretty if slightly overdone young lady in the business-blousy attire of a flight attendant. “Glad you could make it.”

“We’ve been here for nearly forty-five minutes,” Daniel rumbled. “Waiting for you.”

Marshall pulled back a hair, affecting innocence. “Have you?”

Daniel glared at him. That laddish behavior might work with women, but he was in no mood for it. Still, at least he had his safety net, now, and they could get the evening started. He opened his hand toward Rob. “Rob, this is my brother, Marshall-“

“You must be the utterly fascinating history teacher I’ve heard so much about,” Marshall said, grabbing Rob’s hand for a quick shake. He pulled his own hand back, to gesture to the young lady under his other arm. “This is…?”

“Renee,” the young lady prompted, nodding at them with a too-white smile.

“Renee,” Marshall repeated, as though to remind himself. “She’s just here for a layover, so we’ll leave you two gents and get to our laying over, eh?” He grinned to the woman, who giggled airily.

Daniel laid a pausing hand on his brother’s bicep, fighting against the urge to wrap his fingers into the muscle. Or his arm around his neck. “What do you mean, you’re leaving?”

“Renee has an early flight out,” Marshall half-shouted over the din. He leant closer to Daniel’s ear, to add with more pointed reasoning, “So, I don’t have long to work my magic. Don’t ruin this for me, Danny-boy.”

Daniel shot the girl the most pleasant smile he could muster even as he clawed his fingers into the sleeve of Marshall’s jacket. “But you’re the one who made all the arrangements for tonight,” he hissed through a grimace. “I have no idea what the plan is.”

“Ah, yeah,” Marshall drawled. “I didn’t really plan anything. I just thought we’d all have a few drinks here and then go our separate ways. You know how it works.”

Daniel felt himself blanch. “No, I don’t know!”

Marshall drew him a step to the side, away from the table, to mutter, “You’ll be fine. He obviously likes you, or he wouldn’t be here. Now, please, Daniel, this girl is on a very tight schedule, and, if we don’t leave now, I won’t be able to squeeze myself in.”

“What is that, innuendo?” Daniel muttered after him, even as Marshall put his hand out to Rob again.

“So nice to have finally met you! But, if you’ll excuse us.” And, that was it, before his brother and his brother’s flyaway fling left them alone. Or, as alone as they could get in this crowded bar.

Across the table, Rob blinked in temporary stupefaction. “Well. That was…”

“Shit?” Daniel supplied for him.

Rob replied with an easygoing laugh. “I was going to say, different. But, sure. Shit applies.”

Daniel shook his head. “I’m sorry-“

“Don’t worry about it.” Rob glanced at the remnants of his drink, then back up to Daniel. He called across the table, “You want to get out of here?”

“Absolutely!” Daniel called back, and downed the rest of his wine. Thankfully, they’d paid for their drinks at the bar, so all they had to do was finish up and step out.

The February air nipped at his face, but the relative quiet of the street was welcome. Rob’s cheeks and the tip of his nose turned a blood-rush pink noticeable when they passed beneath a streetlamp or in front of some crowded restaurant or bar casting its lights across the sidewalk, but he still smiled, to spite the cold. His lips were paler than they’d been at the bar, and Daniel faced front, trying his best not to wonder if they’d feel cold-dry and rough or smooth with waiting warmth if he kissed them.

“What should we do, now?” Rob asked as they crunched over a light cover of frozen snow.

“We could try to get some dinner,” Daniel suggested, because ducking into a darkened alley to pull Rob on top of him probably wasn’t the best option.

Rob stopped at the corner. “We’re not going to be able to get in anywhere nice, not without a reservation. I’d say we could just call it a night…” He scratched at the back of his head and showed off a pointed eyetooth in an uneven smile. “…but, it’d be a shame to waste the sitter.”

Daniel chewed on his lip a moment. While he hated the idea of taking a page from Marshall’s playbook, he offered, “You know, I don’t live far. We could get a bottle of wine, I could make us some dinner-“

“Sure,” Rob answered, more readily than Daniel had expected him to do. His smile went full and even. “Anything’s better than staying out here in the cold.”

They stopped into a grocers and managed to find a bottle of Shiraz, since Marshall had been spot on at least about that detail. Rob grabbed an odd collection of foodstuffs, too – a baguette, tomato, spinach, and some brie – and explained, “These are the ingredients for the best easy meal you’ll ever taste, believe me. I learned this one when I spent time at Benelux.”

“Benelux?” Daniel asked while they walked to the flat.

Rob nodded. “It’s an Army garrison, in Belgium. My wife- my ex,” he corrected himself, “her old man worked at Allied Command in Chievres. They wanted me to go career there, but….”

“But, what?”

Rob shrugged, without any remorse. “We had Paige. And, you know, I didn’t want to be running around the globe with a little girl growing up at home without her daddy.” He smiled, his face turning pink again, not from the biting chill. “I know, it’s old fashioned-“

“No,” Daniel assured him. “It’s nice.” He stopped them in the light cast from the apartment complex and nodded. “This is me,” he said, and led them up the short steps to the main entrance. “I’m on four. You don’t mind if we walk, do you? The lifts here are slow as molasses.”

“I don’t mind,” Rob said easily. “A little exercise gets the blood flowing.”

Daniel didn’t let his brain wander to the naughtier places to which that line of thought could lead and instead took the stairs with even, measured steps. He’d walked up and down these flights countless times, but, tonight, when he got to the flat door, his muscles felt tingly, and the keys jangled free out from his grip.

“I seem to be all thumbs, at the moment,” he muttered as he stooped, making the conscious decision to crouch and not bend at the waist, because Rob was standing pretty close behind him and-

“God, would you hurry up?”

“Sorry!” Daniel blurted, rising and spinning with his hands open when Rob let out a little roll of laughter that was equal parts amused and apologetic.

“I’m kidding. Half the time, I do this with three extra bags and a six-year-old slung over my shoulder.” His mouth curled with a different kind of smile, and he added, “But, I don’t want to stand in this hallway all night, either.”

Daniel chuckled, too, mostly for his idiocy. He opened the door and ushered Rob inside first, allowing himself a stray glance along his form. Only one, though, because, despite any gross action his charged libido might press him to do, he genuinely enjoyed spending this time getting to know Rob, not necessarily in any horizontal way.

“This is a nice place,” Rob said in perusing appraisal. “Just you?”

“Yeah. The second bedroom’s too small for anything more than a study. Can I take your coat?”

Rob smiled back over his shoulder with a look Daniel was certain he hadn’t meant to come off as smoky or alluring, but that prompted a suck of his lips to bring some spit back to his mouth. “Sure.” He set the bag of groceries on the close kitchenette counter and shimmied his big shoulders out from his coat with a supple roll of his arms, like swimming a stroke.

Daniel latched both hands around the coat to keep them to himself.

“You want to open the wine?” Rob suggested. He slipped out of his hustler jacket, too, and started to roll up his sleeves, like a clean-cut Cool Hand Luke. “I’ll get to work on the food.”

Daniel nodded and smiled, grateful to have something to occupy his too-busy brain.

He usually – nearly always – cooked for himself, and only for himself. Having another person in the kitchen area with him felt different. Nice. Marshall had a tendency to insinuate himself in the most ostentatious, obtrusive way, pestering Daniel with his bragging and critique, but Rob just worked, pausing only once in a while, to ask where the cling film was or how Daniel would like the leftover spinach kept. As Rob’s hands moved in steady concentration, slicing this and chopping that, Daniel poured their wine and set out some plates, and they both talked about less complicated things than the state of dating for single and divorced men in the big city. When the prep was done, they ate on opposite sides of the island, and Daniel found Rob had been right: the sandwich of brie, spinach, and tomato was the best simplicity he’d ever tasted, and he teased:

“Did you learn anything else from your time with the Belgies?”

Rob pulled his lips together in a tight, embarrassed smile. “Nothing I’d discuss in polite company,” he said, and laughed.

Daniel eased back on his tall seat. “Do you mean me?”

“You’re probably the most polite company I’ve ever had,” Rob confirmed, and laughed again. Daniel did, as well, but with an inner discouragement he tried his best not to let show through. In an effort not to disappoint Rob’s opinion, he returned the rest of the evening’s conversation and interaction to topics basic and above board, like work, hobbies, and films, which Rob brought up after supper, when he drifted over to the shelf of classic DVDs in the main bookcase.

“You’ve got a nice little collection, here. Lots of classics.”

Daniel came over from the sink, dusting the remnants of soap suds against his trouser leg. “My film tastes are a bit conservative, I know-”

“Nothing wrong with that.” Rob turned back to the shelf and pulled “Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid” from its place. “You’ve got some outlaws in here, too,” he said, and flashed that knee-weakening smile again before setting the case back again to peruse some more. He made a noise in the back of his throat as he looked at the case for “The Thin Man.” “Paige is in her Disney princess phase, so it feels like ages since I’ve seen a movie with actual people in it.”

“You fancy watching one?”

Rob glanced at his watch and blew another hum. “I’d better not. It’s already nine-thirty, and I promised Maddi I’d be back by ten.”

Daniel shrugged. “You can take some with you, if you like.”

Rob turned to him, eyes bright. “You wouldn’t mind?”

“Not at all. I’ve watched all of these a bunch of times.”

As if by fate, Rob pulled “The Hustler” from its place and examined the jacket. “I’ve never seen this one.”

“Oh, that’s a good one,” Daniel told him. “Newman and Laurie really steam up the screen. Or, you know, as steamy as films got in ’61,” he said, and chuckled.

Rob pulled a hissing breath between his teeth and set the DVD back among its mates. “Maybe I’d better not. Even tame-steamy would feel like I’m watching a porno, with a seven-year-old in the house.”

Daniel laughed at his humor. “Next time, then.”

“Yeah.” Rob smiled wide, but with a slow, thoughtful bob of his head. He popped his brows up. “And, hey, if you ever feel like watching some Disney princess stuff at our house, feel free to come by!”

“Actually,” Daniel said, swinging one finger through their laughter. “I wore out an old VHS copy of ‘Sleeping Beauty’ when I was a kid, because Maleficent was my absolute favorite villain.”

“Oh, my God!” Rob said, grinning like a kid, himself. “We love her, too!” They broke into more laughter, now, and Rob shook his hand between them for emphasis. “That is the only one of those movies I can watch over and over again, just because of Maleficent. You know, Paige will crazy-fall in love with you, if you watch that movie with us.”

Daniel couldn’t stop grinning. “If only it were that easy for everyone else!”

He’d meant the words as a joke, but Rob’s laughter faded with a blink. His smile, too, and Daniel cursed whatever stupid thing he’d said to squelch their heretofore easily growing familiarity.

“I’m sorry.”

“It’s okay,” Rob murmured. “I should be the one apologizing. I mean, it’s been a decade since I’ve been on a Valentine’s Day date. Literally, I was a teenager the last time I did anything like this,” he said, with a short, embarrassed laugh that Daniel thought he had no reason to add. He looked down at his hands, which stretched and played at the air between them. “I really like you, but there are just so many rules, and mores, and I…I don’t know what’s right, or acceptable, these days. We teach the kids at school to respect other people’s boundaries, and never assume, and don’t do anything that could be construed as offensive, or too forward or infringing-“

“Rob?”

“And, Valentine’s Day is so loaded!” Rob went on with a shake of his head Daniel would have called frustrated. “Everything about it is so cliché, and I really don’t want to be just another stupid statistic for a greeting card company…!”

“Rob,” Daniel said again, more gently, now, and the other man lifted his gaze, the jagged rings of green fire around the hazel inner circles flaring bright with cautious hope. Daniel offered them a low, assuring smile. “Would you kiss me? I’ve wanted you to kiss me all night,” he began, but the rest was lost in Rob’s sudden lean, and the press of his lips.

While there was no harsh cut of teeth or lap of tongues, Daniel still tasted the smooth, buttery tannins of the wine, and the softer creaminess of the brie. And, beneath that, a tang of salty caramel that paired too perfectly with the faint smell of cloves he pulled from Rob’s cheek not to be his natural taste. It was a combination at the same time so inscrutably complex and still so sublimely simple, he didn’t think his senses, his perceptions, his whole bloody life, would ever be quite the same after this kiss. And, they weren’t.

 

2015 Holiday Story (not-)Swap: “Moments to Remember”

Last year, I talked about how my sister and I used to swap stories on Christmas morning.  I won’t be spending Christmas morning with my sister this year, but I’ve taken to writing holiday stories even without a swap. The holiday season is about sharing and joy, and writing has always given me great joy, that I like to share.

This year’s holiday story, like last year’s, is with the Wrights and McAllisters, the two families from my “Finding Mister Wright” series of free writes. Only a few folks read the 2015 Thanksgiving holiday story with Rob’s family, but this Christmas-themed one – at Marshall and Caitlin’s new family home – is a shorter, simpler tale. In some ways, anyway. It deals with memories, kids, and keeping the important things in mind during the holidays, which I’m trying to do more every day.

“Moments to Remember” [~3580 words / 15 pages DS]
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Next time, I’ll talk about my writing year in review. In the meantime, happy writing, happy reading, and happy holidays to you all!

“Thanks and Giving” [Another “Finding Mister Wright” holiday free-write]

I’m currently away from the Internet, celebrating Thanksgiving with family, the best way to celebrate any holiday. Those good feelings prompted me to compose the following free-write in my “Finding Mister Wright” universe:

“Thanks and Giving” [PDF opens in new window]
~9600 words / 38 pages DS

This one concerns family, of course, and cooking, just like I promised. It’s long, so I don’t expect anyone at all to read it. But it was a story of Rob and his mother that had been nagging at me for a while to be written, so I answered the only way I knew how, to write it. Paige is here, and Daniel, too, as well as a few new faces. Some of them are even new to Rob and the rest! There are real if subtle conflicts here between mother and son, father and daughter, brother and sister, that I’ve experienced in one way or another across my many years. As always, the stories help me understand those experiences a little bit better, but hopefully if you read this one, you’ll get some enjoyment out of it, too.

Happy families to you all!

Writing Therapy

These last several weeks, I’ve felt mostly horrid. It’s been a rather hectic fall semester, with new projects to complete as well as new fires to put out. My students are either going through Senior-itis or studying abroad, so all the work they would ordinarily do falls to me, too. This isn’t actually that awful – what takes my students twelve hours to do, I can do in half that time – but it does mean tasks pile on through the week. Add to that my sleeping schedule is wonky due to changing weather and light, and I’ve felt sluggish and unmotivated.

I’ve also been working on a story edit.

When I edit, I try my best to concentrate on that story. It helps me keep overall voice and continuity better than notecards or Scrivener can do. I still read while I edit, because I learn more by example from my favorite authors on what’s important in a story, how to keep plot threads moving, and when to dangle, when to pull up, and when to trim loose. But the only writing I’ve done for the last month or so has been rewrites of an already-finished draft. Rewrites are good: I changed two whole chapters, cleaned up more than a half-dozen more, and had one character do a near-180 flip on me. It’s all better for the story as a whole, but it was sucking me dry.

I discussed this with my husband, who reminded me that “[r]ewriting is still writing.” But, he is much more comfortable working from what’s already on the page. The blank page doesn’t bother me; I just start writing words off the top of my head. In fact, it’s hard for me to find blank pages in my notebook when I need one, because so many of them are filled with first lines, initial ideas, or jots of dialogue. For some people, that’s all the writing they need to keep going. For me, all of those little notes and ideas are merely warm-up, like stretching before a workout. Have you ever just stretched and not followed up with the real workout? My body reacts poorly to that. It wants to work hard and make a sweat. Why couldn’t I see what that stretching-and-not-working was doing to my writer’s brain?

On my Thursday morning commute, I decided to open up a blank document. I just couldn’t face again one of the annoying scenes in the edit I was trying to make work. I began typing off the top of the head…and, over the next two days, I typed out over 4700 words of a new free write.

I haven’t felt this good in a long time.

Friends and colleagues – real writers – supported this, with cheers like, “Writing is therapy!” and “Writing is the best medicine.” I had apparently forgotten how sapped I get when I don’t allow myself the freedom to write something new and for fun.

Editing strengthens a story. It’s an integral part of making the story the best it can be. And, I do enjoy it, especially to see the finished product. But, sometimes, I have to let myself just write, for the pure joy of the story, the characters, and the process itself.

“Breathe, another ‘Finding Mister Wright’ short-fic”
[~4750 words/16 pages; PDF]

Clicking the link above will take you to the latest chapter in my “Finding Mister Wright” slice-of-life series. It’s about love and family, fatherhood and brotherhood, and the big and little changes those things cause in us. It’s a free-write, so it’s choppy in parts and rambling in others, but I decided not to edit it despite that. Part of what brings me back to these characters time and again is how much joy and love they have for each other, and how much of the same I have for them. I doubt they’d be so therapeutic otherwise.

How is your writing journey progressing? What do you do when you find yourself in a writing or editing funk?

A little breathing room

September seems to be a popular birthday month. It must have something to do with cuddling together when it’s cold outside during the traditional winter. I celebrated my birthday this past week, too. While I may not have been able to celebrate with everyone I would have wanted there, I did enjoy a very fun and filling tasting menu supper in the city.

But I’m not here to talk about indulgent food.

Recently, several storyteller friends of mine have brought up the topic of scenes or chapters in a story where nothing really happens. There’s no big action, no deep conflict, just the characters slowing down to talk, reflect, or enjoy themselves. The prevalent argument in today’s how-to columns is that every scene should push the story forward. In some cases, that technique works: strict short stories, for example, where the prose should be so airtight that every dialogue and action needs to contribute to the plot. For a longer story, though, I believe slow-downs are necessary.

A story can’t stay at 11 all of the time. The characters – and the reader – need some breathing room between the big conflicts. This downtime can be represented in any number of ways: a conversation, a love scene, even a birthday party.

For some reason, I like using birthday celebrations to look at a character’s life. In 1 More Chance!, I used Chie’s boyfriend’s birthday to introduce her to his family (among other things). In Fearless, Ross’s birthday is an excuse for his crew to get together for a party on the beach. In the “Finding Mister Wright” universe, Rob’s birthday is used to contrast the ideas of life and death. And, in my most recent story on the subject, one of my From Hell bounty hunters uses an old birthday to bury his past. Now, 1 More Chance! is a massive, meandering relationship story, and the “Finding Mister Wright” and From Hell examples are self-indulgent free-writes, so they follow their own non-rules. The Fearless birthday chapter, though, offers what I’ve always thought to be a necessary moment of relaxation between the second and third arcs, where the characters get to have a little bit of simple happiness before the new conflict hits. Seen alone, the party on the beach doesn’t do much for the novel as a whole. The main point of the chapter is to show how well these characters fit together, and how far they’ve come from the beginning of the story. There’s not much more to it than that. But I think it’s good to have smaller, calmer moments like this in a story, to show the reader who and what has been affected by the conflict that’s happened, or by the conflict yet to come. And, just as it’s good to have these smaller, calmer moments in stories, it’s good to have them in life.

Birthdays are as much about our own growth as they are about family, friends, noisemakers, and food. That growth includes rest as well as action. So let’s push on with our stories. But let’s also not forget to allow for a little bit of breathing room now and again.

What are your thoughts on quiet moments in stories? Do you ever use a birthday occasion in your stories? What kind of birthday cake do you like best? 🙂

A moment of writerly hubris

I think all writers are protective of their characters. We’re told to kill our darlings, and the idea of making our characters face hardships, including death, is important, because conflict drives a lot of life. It certainly drives drama. As much as I love talking about my stories and characters, I always try to rein myself in, because I’ve realized over the years that nobody has or ever will care as much for my characters as I do. I can hopefully entertain with their stories, and maybe – if I’m lucky – I can even make a reader feel something for one of my characters, whether that’s compassion, disgust, fear, or just a simple interest to see what happens next. But, sometimes, I find myself becoming too attached to these characters.

I have – more than once, I’m ashamed to admit, mostly for the silliness of it – cringed at a misspelling of a beloved character’s name. Not everybody gets persnickety about names the way I do, probably because most people didn’t grow up in the environment I grew up in with a name like mine. For many years, I simply gave up correcting people over the pronunciation of my name, because it just seemed pedantic of me to do so. But not too long ago, a colleague asked me straight-out:

“What’s the correct pronunciation of your name? Is it MAY-you-me, or MA-you-me?”

I gave my standard answer at the time, which was a shrug and a dismissive, “I answer to both.”

He came back at me: “Yes, but it’s just as easy for me to pronounce your name the right way, if you tell me.”

That simple logic slapped me in the face, and I remember thinking, You know what? That’s right!

Nowadays, I introduce myself with the proper pronunciation, and I’ll correct someone if they give me that quizzical I-didn’t-quite-get-that look. For the most part, I let it go, mostly because I don’t want to sound like a pedantic ass. But when it happens with my characters, I still feel a little flare of defensiveness for them. Because I’m the only one who will ever care enough.

The following “Finding Mister Wright” short (link opens in a new window) came about with the pedantic ass portion of my personality in full force. I think it’s fitting, though, for the moment. And, it was fun to write, which I think is the most important bit.

“Always Daniel”
[another “Finding Mister Wright” fic – ~2100 words/7 pages]

Do you have an easy name? If not, do you school folks on the proper pronunciation? Or, do you let it go? If you could change your name, what name would you choose?

Extra question: If you read the story above, what name do you vote for, for little baby Wright? (Orville and Wilbur are not options.)