The Eve and Alan characters are new to me. I’m still feeling my way around them and their post-WWII world. I already like them, though, and they’re already forming a story for themselves. Love (and sex) play a part because that’s how they first came to my mind. A few kind readers took a chance on my initial foray into their world, in the vignette “Apples and Eve”, available by request if you so comment.
I’ve never written this genre before. These characters are speaking to me, though. Who knows? Maybe, if the feedback is good, I’ll try my hand at more of this particular story. At any rate, if you decide to read this little scene, I’d be grateful if you share your thoughts. Click the link below to read the PDF; it runs ~1700 words, or 6 pages double-spaced.
Warning: This story contains description of mature interactions between adults.
And the Gondala earns a new mark of fame, or infamy, depending on who you ask.
There’s a lot going on in this scene, but the multiple dynamics are handled well. We get a sense of who each character is without being hit by exposition dumps. Picking up the scene at the end if a rough night leads to honest and biased conversation, but in a good way. It feels natural between lovers and family.
So, was George finally pushed over the edge? Did Lerner have more enemies than Alan and Eve knew? Or is there a neutral pyschopath on the loose?
Whatever the case, I can’t wait to read more!
Thanks for taking the time to give this scene a shot, Chase, and thank you for offering your feedback! I really appreciate it. 🙂
I realize I’m throwing a lot at the reader. This same scene in a larger, more complete piece would hopefully not feel so overwhelming with names and personalities. I was trying to give reasons for everyone and everything in a very tight space. I’m pleased that you could feel the biases that each of these characters has, though, especially since that’s part of what I’m going for here.
Thank you again!